For a chapter that was basically setup, this had a lot of good stuff in it. I was surprised by how you grew the relationship between Elsa and Gaston, and can't quite figure out how that plays into the story (yet). The upcoming trial should be interesting, but I am not sure how it playss either. I guess what I am trying to say is that this story is not at all predictable, which I find quite refreshing! Right now it's one of my favorites to see an update on.
Good little transition chapter. A few items of note:
- I enjoyed Anna's conversation with Giselle, although the collar and lifestyle reference surprised me. I don't recall that coming up earlier.
- I really like Olaf's attiitude towards his parents split. Smart little kid.
- Anna still strikes me as way too impetuous. She seems to make decision way too quickly and doesn't think them through. The situation with Moana is likely to blow up in her face.
Great to see the new chapter. To me it feels like a significant pivot point. It sets the stage for Elsa and Tiana to break up, as well as Elsa to start wondering why Anna is behaving so oddly. perhaps she'll come to the same conclusion that Anna originally had. I am very curious to see how you progress the story between the girls while they are physically seperated. I have an idea, and it will beintersting to see how it plays out.
As usual, grate writing and a fun read!
This chapter contains an interesting shift in the character dynamics. Suddenly, Anna has a very clear view of where her interests lie. I wasn't quite sure how it to that point so quickly, and it concerns me a little since early on in the story it was established that she tends to jump in too hard and too fast. Let's hope that isn't the case here.
I alos noticed that we are seeing a new side of Tiana. She seems to be a little obsessed with her own fame, which makes her kind of shallow. I have to wonder if this isn't a pre-cursor to future problems for her and Elsa. It's something that pretty much has to happen at some point, but until now, I haven't seen anything that told me how that might come about.
Good story so far. I am looking to see how you bring it all together in the end, although I will admit to being surprised with the introduction of Jack. I think that this may be the one and only Elsanna story where he appears.
I've been following htis story since the start. Lots of good stuff in it. This chapter confused me a little, since it was the first one that didn't really seem to advance the story. When it started I thought that you were laying the groundwork for the start of the Elsa/Tiana split, but that doesn't seem to be happening yet. The good news (to me) is that tells me that this is going to be a slow burn story, which I love, especially with an author that makes regular updates.
Nice work so far. You are defintely building up the suspense in regards to finding out what kept the girls seperated so long. While it might be Elsa's secret feelings for Anna, I don't quite buy that, since it's not something that she would ahve easily confessed to Anya. That makes it even more interestign to see where you take it.
This is a pretty decent chapter that has a couple of interesting moments in it. I was surprised that the trial moved so quickly. I have no idea if the way it was presented was true to life, but it felt like it was (or at least followed the same formula and pacing that we see in telelvision law dramas). What I couldn't quite figure out was what the key takaway was supposed to be...
- Elsa's capability as a lawyer? She came accross as good, but not amazing. She even admitted to making rookie mistakes during the trial but got lucky with the outcomes.
- The emotions of going up against her ex friend/lover? That didn't really come through either, other than a "oh well" footnote.
- I also considered that it might be an expose on coversion therapy, but considering the primary audience for this story, probably unneccesary.
That entire train of thought leaves me with one conclusion - this is a setup chapter! Something BIG is going to happen in the future, and we will all look back and go "Oh, I remember that!" (At least once with every story I have to try and guess where the author is headed. My track record? Horrible... but it's fun to speculate!)
Good solid writing in this chapter. I really appreciate the little details in it, like "Courtroom 2B". I also love the fact that you title your chapters. Not all authors will do that, and as the stories get longer, it's nice to have that little reference to find your place again (like when something BIG happens in the future).
Wow! What a great chapter. I didn't think I was going to like the Anna/Esme interlude, but that was well written and a lot of fun. Not a bad first date and I think the goats are going to have to fend for themselves tonight.